Full Name: Kleko Ney'Twobi

Nickname(s): Twi

Age: 18

Gender: female

Home world Ryloth

Race: Twi’lek

Occupation: getting contacts and information.

Eyes: These green shiny eyes often make people look over their shoulders.

Hair: She has Lekku's instead of hair

Credits: depends. ;)

General Description: Slim skinny figure as marks of here past. Her skin is purple with deep purple stripes. She really smiles and when she does smile she never shows her thees. Twi's is rarely angry but when she gets angry she can shout and kick for hours or just lock herself into a room (This can go on for hours as shes weary stubborn.

Clothing: Raged black leather with lots of holes.

Weapons: none

Other Equipment:

Habits: Chewing on a iron ball witch she got hanging in a necklace she always wear (for this purpose). She normally yawn to fill awkward silences that occur.

Transportation: none

Inventory: Food and water for two weeks and a old not working gun.

Family: Her Mother died one year after her birth and her father she herself killed at the age of 14. Also a unknown number of half brothers and sisters.

History: Twobi were born on Ryloth in 34 BBY or so they at least told here. Her youth were dark. They were filled with pain, humiliation and hatred. Twi's mother died one year after her death and this caused her father to take care of here all alone. He was at that time working to become the head of his clan and spent long hours talking politics's with his fellow Twi'lek. At the age of six Twi's father were publicly disgraced by his enemies within the politic and lost his job.
That evening he began to drink heavily and came drunk home to his only daughter (that he had accepted). because of this Twi had to work as a errand runner and her father a worker at the market. At this time Twi got to know her father a whole lot better and she learned to hate him. Often she said that she'd run away but every time she even mentioned this her father drew his old laser gun (used for "protection" while he was a politician) and said that he would kill here if she ever tried.
like this the years passed but at the age of ten people wouldn't let here work for them anymore and here father forced her to live as a prostitute. At the start she had refused blankly but with the gun pointed at her shed had begun here grizzly work. The only friend she ever had during her child hood was a young twi'lek boy who she never knew the real name of but had always called Page. Especially during the times here father forced here to be a prostitute he helped here and when Twi was 14 (he 16) she told about her plot to kill her father. One night Page invited her father out and after several drink got the man on his feet. they walked out in the cold nights were Twi waited in her small purple hands holding her own fathers gun. That night she fleed from Ryloth. She ended up in a shuttle on a trip for Tatooen. It was on this trip she heard about bounty hunters for the first time and when the shuttle finally landed half a year later she had here mind clear. She stayed on Tatooen for three and a half year while talking to many of the traveling bounty hunters and while getting money for the trip to Mandalore. Her fathers gun she kept as a memory of her past so that she never would become the monster her father were.

RPG sample.

Twi looked over the bar. It was empty except a sleeping man over at the corner and the bar man Carl. She walked over and sat down on one of the many chairs. Hey Carl has there been anything worth to hear? The old human man looked up. You mean all the fights and drinking or is it that bounty hunter stuff you want? with a sigh he gave her a glass filled with a blue liquid. Well what can i say? Nothing out of the ordinary has happened here wen you were away with that man. yes by the way what happened with him? Did you get the ride? Twi: No he only wanted to get laid like all the other pervs out there. But if nothing has happened here a might just go. Sorry Carl cant waste my time here chatting with you. she gave him a small smile drank up here drink and walked disappointed out.



Death:
Twi walks out of Pooja Naberrie's Apartment. "What to do now" She ponders. "I'll just get myself some sleep and then of to work!" As she starts walking when she hears steps behind her. "Hey you do you have any credits for a person in need?" says a horse voice. As Twi turns she sees a female Togruta in a tattered robe stand behind her. "Sorry but i dont have much and the little I have I need for myself" Twi starts walking backwards while drawing her old rusty gun. "Are you going to attack me with that thing!?" The Togruta asks with a hint of panic. Twi still backing lays her finger on the trigger "Ger away from me! I wont have any sympathy for the likes of you!". The Togruta falls forward and covers her head. With a quite loud *FRRZZZD* Twi pull the trigger and a laser shots out.. the wrong way. With a hole in hear head Twi falls to the ground.

Hey there, so far your sample is good, a few mixed words here and there but still sound. The only issue is concerning your RPG sample. It is hard to determine when someone is speaking, always try to seperate it and use " " where needed.

For example:

Twi looked over the bar. It was empty except a sleeping man over at the corner and the bar man Carl. She walked over and sat down on one of the many chairs.

"Hey Carl has there been anything worth to hear?"

The old human man looked up

See what I mean?

yes but im not good at rpging alone. but when it comes to reall rpg i am better. i will remeber the " " and i would remind you that i play rpgs in real life

Well like Padmé said, it's very good except for a few minor mistakes.
We always advice our members to write their posts with microsoft word before posting it, as it is very good in detecting spelling mistakes.

I vote approval, but we will guide you alone the way if neccessary..... All we need now is Anakin's approval as both of us must agree.

I approve, just remind what we said and everything should be fine ;)

Congrats Kleko you are the first true member of our forum :) You can now post in all of the forums, set yourself to a planet, probably Coruscant from your profile idea.... And inhabit there for a time and build your skills and money

Remember to find study/ work or both :)

You also now have 500 Credits, which will always be placed on your signature

Always keep it updated! It's very important that you do that, we will keep a track on all spendings and earnings so there is no cheating ;)

Once you respond here we will move your profile to the Character forum