Black Hawk looked at his father, the barbarian boy had much to learn about the ways of the tribe, but in time he will learn them.
Hawk drew a saber, it was long and thin, Falcon drew a scimitar, shorter and thincker.
Both father and son took a head swipe, Hawk berely 15 and his father 35, they swung their blades at each other again and again, Hawk had done this every day since he was 10.
Only when a boy wounds his father in battle can he fight with the rest of the tribe, Hawk had done this over 4 years, and was starting the get the edge of his fathers talent.
He swung the blade up once more, stopped it and reversed and swung it at his fathers stomach, Falcon knelt, his hand clutching his stomach.
"My son, you are part of the tribes warriors, welcome to battle...."

Thats pretty good, good work and post more. I look forward to reading it.

thanks, if people post on my stories I can do the next part of them, but since they don't, I can't post the next Part.


Hawk looked at the tribe elder and the council, 5 men, all of them battle hardened veterans who have grown old and couldn't battle anymore.
"Pigeon, test him," said Eaglebeak
Pigeon stepped forwards and drew a dagger and a short sword.
Hawk readied his saber.
The older warrior leapt at Hawk, he blocked and spun to the left, his saber catching the dagger and flipping it out of Pigeon's hand, he cursed him as he then swiped at the warrior.
Pigeon jumped back as Hawk stabbed at him, he then tryed to lop off Hask's head with a vicious cut, Hawk blocked it and dropped his blade.
He threw himself at Pigeon, knocking him over.
"Halt, test over, Hawk is a proven Warrior."
Falcon beamed.
The council clapped.
Eaglebeak didn't look impressed though.....

does no one like my story? :( :( :( :( :(

i would have replied but then you made that gay comment! :angry:

It is a good story , its not about warhammer is it?

whats so gay about it? :unsure:

Its a Norse village, tribe of the Bird, lol

but, then next part



"Sparrow, how goes the supplies?" Asked Birdface.
"Sorry, no improvement, not much other than a few more small bags of grain."
"Well hurry up, the Chaos Lord wants us moving in four days."
"FOUR DAYS?"
"Yes, and if we aren't even ready he'll kill the whole village."
Sparrow cursed, she wasn't that good at pulling up the crops.
Hawk walked up to her.
"Here, give me that and you go get another few bags."
"Thanks Hawk, I heard you were took on into the Savage Bird."
"Yeah I was, but I am leading the Grey Falcons instead."
"Whys that?"
"Their leader was killed."
"Oh..."
Hawk and Sparrow continued to load the grain and other food stuffs into the horses....

Wots so gay about it? It made you sound like an idiot (you are not an idoit)And all the sad faces , could you get anymore in?

Norse village, tribe of the Bird , never herd of it , but im guessin its warhammer cos you mentioned the chaos lord.

It needs to be longer and more action ;)

Yeah, like a thunderhawk shooting a melta torpedo into the village and killing everyone!

lol , I take it you like action Confesser.

Anyway , hurry up and do the next part Darmot (And hope it has more action!) ;)

this is the perparation only, theres plenty of action later on, lots of gore if you want, also, I write this as I go along.
;)




Hawk led the Grey Falcons in the forest, all the warriors of the Bird had been called to battle, and Hawk leading Scouts, he ducked under a tree branch.
He let out a bird whistle and fifteen the same pitch and sound answered his ears.
He walked towards the edge, the others had moved with him, they were guarding the rear, the fun job, as the others called it.
20 or so Keslivites were marching towards a watch tower, they could of caused trouble to the Army, if they lived, they were running, that ment they knew something.
He let out four shrill whistles and was answered by 15 of the same, he drew his Saber and charged out the forest.
"FOR THE BIRD!" He shouted. "FOR TZEENTCH!"
He charged at the Keslivites, the Tzeentchians assaulted them.
"Hawknose, with me, Falcon, Sparrow, move to the left, everybody else, take them on the front!"
Falcon and Sparrow moved to intercept the lead runners. Their blades clashed but soon the Keslivites fell to the strength of Tzeentchian Warriors.
"FOR TZEENTCH!" He shouted again, as he clashed with two of the bearlike warriors, he fought back the mens axes and drew a dagger, throwing it at another of the false god worshippers, he cut one of the barbariab peoples and punched the other in the face, Tzeentch would be pleased with this attack....

This dose not make sense, You told Hawknose to go with you , yet she ended up with Sparrow.I thought Sparrow was just some farmer chik?!?!?!?!?!?!?/Your story confuses me AND NEEDS MORE ACTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

oops. need to fix that.
and anyway.
I don't know enough bird names to cover about 1209 people, so some characters have the same name, this Sparrow is a weedy warrior

Very nice bro, keep up the good work. Its a good enjoyable story :D :P

Loraquite(you probably dont spell it like that)cokatoo,robin,thrush,kookaburra, blackbird,heron,flamngo,ox peker,humbing bird,goose,duck,

theres some

o and

blue tit, great tit,spotted dick,lol