Aeris sighed and looked at the beautiful wedding photograph she smiled to herself the photo. Showed Cloud with his arm's around her he had his tuxcido jacket off his red tie loosend he was smileing brightly the smile she.
Fallen in love with she was snuggeled up to him her hair curled and straightend with pink flower's in her hair her wedding dress was made out of the finest pink fabric she was smileing brightly too the Honeymoon. Was so romantic he took her on a moonlight walk along the beach the water now and then splashed their bare feet. There was a blanket laid on the sand a picnic hamper
and a bottel of champaigne awaited them "You did this for me" she had exclaimed
"Your worth it" he had whispered in her ear.
She blushed later they where makeing love passionatly it was the first time she had sex. She got pregnant on the honeymoon and month's later Sora Strife was born.

And today it was their first annaversary she smiled as she fed her young son she loved her littel boy so much and hated being apart from him if she heard him crying during the night she rushe's out of bed and straight to him sometimes she just watche's her son sleep Cloud has to get her to come back to bed.
It was going to be hard on her to leave her son for a week but they needed time to be alone Cloud is looking forward to the break. He loves his son as much as Aeris dose sometime's he get's out of bed and let's Aeris rest they where leaving Sora with his. Aunt Tifa
"Aeris hurry up wher gonna be late" Cloud said as he rushed past her she picked Sora up and walked outside with him "Tif the emergancy numbers are on the tabel if Sora cry's during the night pick him up and rock him back to sleep. He like's his milk not to warm and not to cold oh his diapers are by his changing area" Aeris carried on Tifa glanced at Cloud she rolled her eyes.
He knew what that look means Cloud walked up to his wife. And put his arm's around her "Honey where gona miss the plane" she passed Sora to Tifa he lead Aeris to the buggy "bye baby" she called a few minuets later Cloud sped down the road and skided around a corner and you could hear Aeris say Cloud... :cleris:
I will write more when I get some reviews :D :) :woot:

Firstly there are too many run on sentences. Actually, it's not so much run on sentences as sentences not making any sense. Is English your first language, out of question?

Probably should be: Aerith sighned and looked at the beautiful photograph, and she smiled to herself. The photo showed Cloud with his arm around her, and he was wearing his red tie loosed, and smiling brightly as her. I uh... think. You've got random punctuation all over the shop, as well misuse of apostrophes (arm's should be arms as it's plural, not possessive) and you need some commas. You'd run out of breath just reading it outloud.

Also, it's pretty evident to me that you haven't spellchecked this at all, or proof read it. It's easy enough to do; Word has one built in, and there are hundreds of them online.

You're worth it: Aerith is worth it, she doesn't own the worth.

Random tense changes are never good. As a rule, stick to one.

As for the story, there's no actual substance to it. With stories you should show me what's happening, not tell me. The latter is no more fun than reading a shopping list. You seem to rush past things quite quickly too, and this bit probably stuck out most:

This is obviously an important part of anyone's life, and so it deserves more attention than one line. I'm not saying you should write a full blown lemon, but more detail is definitely needed. How does Aerith feel? How does Cloud feel? How does it happen? Does it hurt? And so on, and so forth.

Anyway, try using this site to learn how to use punctuation correctly.