This is my first RP every so cut me some slack if I do it a bit wrong but this RP is set about ten years after the events of KH2 the worlds have all been unconnected again Sora Donald and Goofy have all but dissapered leaveing the worlds to fade who will the.
Pepole turn to now noone knows it is time for New hero's to stand forward and connect all the worlds back together.
If you want to be a hero just send me your bio after I have recevied a few we will then begin

Hero:(type hero at the top if you want to be a hero or put villan)
Name:
Wepon/wepons of choice(the wepons can be from FinalFantasy or KH)
Background:
Hometown:(any town or city from FF or KH)
apperance:
Special power:
Materia:
Secret info:

Hero
Name:Raven
Wepons:oblivian and One winged angel
Background:Raven was born to Vincent and Tifa he is their only son who had a happy life until the Heartless came and destroyed his world takeing his mom and Dad with it Raven survived due to falling into the Darkness.
apperance:Raven has his fathers jet black hair but is a lot more short than vincents long hair
Raven looks out for the others in his party and cures them whenever needed sometimes he changes into a beast dew to his fathers jenova cells
Special Power: Raven can summon Bahumute and Bahumute zero together and change into death strike his Ultimate Beast form
Materia: mastered Holy/mastered Meteor/mastered ultima
secret info:Ravens aunt and uncel are none other than Cloud and Aeris :blast:

That character is evil, I'm being nice here, it's such a Gary Stu.
To least take away some of the more wankish things would be an improvement perhaps?

I agree with what DQ has said, you are concerning yourself far too much with your character being all powerful, and having a past involving the final fantasy characters that you haven't tried to make your character someone original, with a past that takes time to consider the details. Having also observed your posts in the battle RP, you control others characters, not allowing them a chance to defend themselves, dodge, or anything. That makes it not very fun for anyone else. Perhaps you should rethink it a bit.

Try not to make your character so overly powerful, and although this your own choice on how strict you want to be about spelling, but perhaps spell check beforehand, some of the more experienced Roleplayers tend to be less interested when they feel it isn't taken seriously enough to double check. Just some tips.

I agree with DQ and Taco, your character has a bit too many perks going for him to be very workable.

In terms of abilities, being able to summon Bahamut AND Bahamut Zero together screams of an over-powered character. Even Sora was only able to summon one creature at a time, and he'd be arguably one of the more powerful characters around. You should always keep your character's abilities in perspective-- Sora etc. are all one-of-a-kind warriors that saved the worlds. It'd be quite incredulous for someone to suddenly appear and exude power ten times of his, even if it was in the future.

Wielding the One Winged Angel AND Oblivion keyblades is overkill, as you've basically taken two very popular keyblades for yourself (the latter of which could've also played a better plot-related role belonging to someone actually related to Sora/Riku/Kairi).

In terms of relations, your character has too many links to too many popular FF characters. It's generally frowned upon to have an original character related to popular characters anyway, unless done extremely well with extremely good reasons, as it screams of excessive fanboyism and self-inserts. After all, who wouldn't want to be Tifa's boyfriend, Aerith's best friend, Sephiroth's arch enemy and Cloud's closest comrade all at once?

My recommendations:

- Shave off the power-ups. Shave a LOT of it off. It's always more interesting to watch a weak character grow slowly throughout the RP, rather than a strong character start one out.

- Watch the FF-relations. If they serve no purpose for your character's development, other than linking him to some popular faces and giving him an excuse to be even more powerful, dump the idea and go with unnamed parents.

- Also, when planning an RP in a game like KH, several things need to be cleared up for future players: With the worlds separated, what is the mode of transport between worlds? Can people travel between worlds at all? Can materias be used anywhere outside Hollow Bastion, seeing as how it's a FFVII-specific item and doesn't appear anywhere in the KH games? What is the scenario that this RP starts up in-- are the worlds in the midst of being destroyed, are they desolate wastelands, are the Heartless/Nobodies running amok, has a new enemy surfaced? What about the condition of important worlds such as Hollow Bastion/Traverse Town, which characters would most likely go through?

There are many things to consider when planning an RP. Otherwise, it can become quite messy.

Thanks for your comments I will start again :cleris:

I wonder if you'll really do it... First, mind the emos! Don't abuse the poor things! *pats lil Cloud and lil Aeris* Second, spelling IS important. People need to understand you in an rp. And third... imagination. You just add characters and powers, which is as good as bs. Make a new character, new looks, new weapons! Create your own power! It's a lot more interesting than just join up a bunch of powerful characters and create a god.

Now, I know I sound mean, but I'm an rp nazi, worse than Rikku. *winks at her* Licious,plz? ;)

U R NOT WORSE DAN ME. :mad:

~keels u,plz~

Yeah, my advice...is...the....same as theirs...

Okay, yeah, I really just came into this thread to lub SJ. :wub:

*is da loved by getting keeled* ;D