Title: I Just Wrote A Poem!
Description: Feedback, Plz!
pink_fl0wers - September 19, 2005 05:19 PM (GMT)
Broken Angel
In the darkness she prays,
She prays for the light.
In the darkness he waits,
To bring endless night.
She smiles gently
To her warrior true,
He leaps down
And runs her through.
The warrior stares in her eyes,
Blank and lifeless not alive
She is never again to laugh or cry,
Never to get angry or smile.
He touches her gently
Her face, her lips, her hair
It’s like she’s asleep
Asleep but not there.
Her warrior swears vengeance
On Darkness’s head.
He will not stop
Till darkness is dead
He carries her to the waters edge,
For the last time he sees her face
He places a pink flower in her hands
And lets her float to her final resting place.
:cleris: Please no negativity! I beg of you!
yin-chan - September 19, 2005 05:38 PM (GMT)
That's lovely, pink flowers. It's very sweet and beautiful. I loved how you used the quotes from the game too. It captures the poignant sadness of the scene very well!!! ^_^
Good job! ^_^
However, I do believe this should be more suitable in the Lyrics and Poems section. ^_^
Nina - September 19, 2005 09:42 PM (GMT)
Beautiful poem, pink! I :wub: it! <3 It's so elegant and smexy. ^.^
pink_fl0wers - September 20, 2005 10:39 AM (GMT)
Thank you. And I forgot that there was a lyrics/poems section! Sorry!
Meggie - December 23, 2005 10:46 PM (GMT)
Love Blossom - January 1, 2006 01:26 PM (GMT)
Oooh! Very good! :D I hope to see more poems from you. :huggle:
AmayaSaria - January 1, 2006 06:06 PM (GMT)
Aww! That was so pretty! I really liked it! ^___^ :huggle: :cleris:
Andina - January 1, 2006 06:40 PM (GMT)
| QUOTE |
| And I forgot that there was a lyrics/poems section! Sorry! |
No worries, at least all these misplaced posts are keeping my busy! ^_^
*moves*