This chapter is only half finished, but I just want to see what you all think of it so far. The reason being, is that I don't want to post a whole chapter and find people don't like it at all. It's sort of a motivation for me as a lot of people have disliked my stories and writing style in the past and it has had a knock on effect.

Anyway...Don't worry about this chapter as it's only the first one and Cloud and Aerith will be together later on in the story, as I am relating to a scene which happened in the actual game, this scene is absolutely necessary.

Onto the chapter (well...1/2 chapter :lol: )


The Promise

The sun shone through the tree branches onto a crystal clear lake. The water sparkled and glistened as if it were made out of tiny jewels, set out in rows. It was a peaceful and sacred place, it still is. From the doors of a near by, ancient structure stood a man. He looked to be in his early twenties. He was a tall man, with short, spiked hair and icy blue eyes that held a glow. The glow only Shinra soldiers had. They were mako eyes. In his arms, he held a woman, a young woman also in her early twenties. Her long light brown hair was tied back with a pink bow. This matched perfectly with the other garment she wore; a long pink dress and red jacket. No one could see the colour of her eyes, except him. He knew, for he had previously stared into those eyes many times. Those pale hazel eyes which were always so full of life were now closed, never to open again. For this woman, he held so gently in his arms, was dead. She was stabbed in the back by a power-hungry man, plagued by insanity, while she prayed.

The man stepped out of the doorway and into the warmth, which the rays of light gave off. A cool breeze swept across his figure, and ‘hers’. It whipped through his hair, forcing it into odd angles, but he didn’t care. As long as ‘she’ was in his arms, he was okay, he would be alright. Each step he took towards the water’s edge left him winded and weak. This was the biggest struggle of his life. His mind told him it was necessary, his heart told him otherwise. The on-going battle between his heart and mind was tedious, yet he needed it. He had come this far and he was not going to give up now, no matter how much he wanted to take his own life and join her in the heavenly bliss he hoped she had found her way to. His mind had won and he found himself at the edge of the lake. He steadied his breathing and fought back the unwanted tears that threatened to fall. It wasn’t supposed to end like this, not for her. She deserved so much better, she deserved her life, a life, any life, and that was the very least.

The first few steps into the lake were agonising. Everything was happening too quickly. Everybody he knew was in some kind of hurry. He was already knee deep and the water had seeped through his clothes, soaking them thoroughly. If the water was cold, he could not feel it, not because he was numb, but because he didn’t want to feel it. He didn’t want to because he didn’t want to accept what had happened and what was about to happen.

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So what do you think?

Love how it's starting out! Do write more! :cleris:

Thank you for replying! ^_^ so grateful...and yes...I think I will write more :D


Cloud x Aerith 4ever :cleris:

I like it, too! You should write more! :D

If you have any interest, we've got a new Contest for Fanart, Fanfiction, and Doujinshi running now. The new deadline is May 21st. You'll find more info on it here: Third Contest Rules and Guidelines

oooooo that sounds fun! I think I'll write a variation to this story so it's only a one-shot fic...or one chapter lol....this should be fun! Can't wait to get started on it ^_^ :D

that was absolutely gorgeous! I cry at all the fanfiction on this website, its just so sad! :lol: write more! more MORE!!!

It is a very good sttart, I hope you continue! :woot:

:lol: I posted this topic AGES ago. And it's only now that I've finished it!

Well I've finished the first chapter. I didn't add much on, but I figured that you'd like to read the next bit!

And the whole thing can be found HERE

^_^ :cleris: enjoy! :fangirl: